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Winter BreakThe sound of feet was easily heard in the seemingly empty hallway. Laughter followed shortly after as a cold breeze rushed through the hallway as the door opened allowing snow to drift in like delicate flowers in the water. The snow melted before it touched the ground. Winter vacation had finally started leaving the school barren. There would not be a soul remaining to this lonely campus as winter encased the world in white and quickly buried the stains from a student. She clings to her lover a smile on her face as she kisses him. He doesn't return it and instead just stares at her. "I love you." She whispers as she crawls out of the car wreckage. She smiles at him as she lays down in the bed of snow. He watches her, eyes unmoving as they watch her, no compassion as the snow piles on top of her and she whispers loving words to him. He offers no reply as the cold wind freezes her when her final words escape "I always loved you." Her hand lets go of the picture of her deployed husband. N
Unexpected ReflectionThe rain beats against my window sounding like a child who has been given it’s first set of drums. It was a loud, mind numbing sound, letting me forget the problems that plagued my soul and drove me into depression. My being rejected me like Emily rose rejected an exorcism. The rain drowned out my demons and stopped the attacks. It gives me the desired result by keeping the voices away. It makes me feel like I’m not alone. Unlike how I am in this room. The walls are covered in spider webs, but the only thing that remains from the spiders is their carcasses. The walls are cracked some cracks providing fresh air and the few companions. Wait. Silence. I hear someone. I haven’t seen a person, I wonder if it’s someone I know. My mother hid me here to keep me safe, my father stole the key, and I think they forgot me, maybe something happened, I hope they are okay. Again the rain has taken over, but I hear voices, they are getting louder! I feel the fain as my window i
Tile Floors aren't for Me.Laying on the bed I can feel the weight on my chest, suffocating me, willing me to die. I find myself unable to fight the sensations. I can't help but feel the mind numbing coldness as it becomes my blanket. Breathing seems impossible, heartbeats are delayed and fluttering. The simple dripping sound on the tile floor is my only consolation that things will be over soon. My eyes shift to the window to a world lost in black and white. You stole the color from my world as you walked past. Not only that, you sucked the life right out of me. Like a succubi you haunt my sleep as I yearn to be held by you, kissed by you. I want to feel you. I desire your lips possessing mine, pressing me against the bed as you look down at me with those lovely eyes, as you smile with those sinfully seductive lips of yours. Your hand raking through my hair as your lips trail kisses down from my lips to my neck and my body grows tense with the anticipation of your lips. They move towards my shoulder and my arms